Adam5 Posted October 20, 2013 Share Posted October 20, 2013 EmptyYet fullBrokenYet able to love with the piecesBlankYet colorfulMotionlessYet I'm going a hundred miles an hourFallingBut I haven't hit the ground yetLonelyBut crowdedLovedBut coldThey listen to all my storiesBut when I'm seriousThey turn their backThey careBut not reallyAlmost but noSilent tearsAngry wordsFake smilesInside I'm dyingI need to be caughtBut no one is there to catch meHelpNo one comesWhy when you need people the mostThey leave youWhy when you are the loneliestThe crowd disappearsWhy when you need loveThere is none leftWhy when the smile slips away and the tears comeThey turn their backWhy can't it just be simple for onceI need someone to catch meI need someone to brush away my tearsI need someone to make my smile realI need someone to be there even when I push them awayI need someone who will stick by my side no matter how much I want to give upI just need someoneThat someone is supposed to be youYou love me rightWell then prove it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Collette Posted October 21, 2013 Share Posted October 21, 2013 I could probably make it a good song. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Baby Bunny Posted October 21, 2013 Share Posted October 21, 2013 Needs a little improvement but other than that pretty good c: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Painted_Whore♥~ Posted October 21, 2013 Share Posted October 21, 2013 I could probably make it a good song. Conceited comment much? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jem Posted October 21, 2013 Share Posted October 21, 2013 It needs more structure, BUT I guess it could be a song. I thought of it as more of a poem though tbh.. but then most songs start of as poems.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adam5 Posted December 27, 2013 Author Share Posted December 27, 2013 Needs a little improvement but other than that pretty good c: ^-^ thanks me and my band kinda came up with it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adam5 Posted December 27, 2013 Author Share Posted December 27, 2013 It needs more structure, BUT I guess it could be a song. I thought of it as more of a poem though tbh.. but then most songs start of as poems.. ohh yea i know im done inproving it havent been able to get on to post it mabe ill post it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adam5 Posted December 27, 2013 Author Share Posted December 27, 2013 I could probably make it a good song. Yea go ahead man show me your version and ill show you mine i havent been online so i havent been able to but ill message you it when i can Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Taytur_tot_Dino Posted March 11, 2014 Share Posted March 11, 2014 It was awesome what is ur band called? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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