No Boundaries

[-Fuzzy-]

okay okay me try this one more time.... so this is like my first poem ever and i know it's terrible, but i thought i'd get all your opinions on it too. and its not supposed to rhyme....

 

No Boundaries:

 

If I gave up on my dreams,

You would tell me, there are no boundaries.

Why do you pain me for the things I cannot accomplish?

Do you not see that all I need is you?

Do you not see that I love you?

I remember The day we first met,

The day I failed at my largest dream,

The day you told me all was possible,

The day I fell in love with you.

I remember the day you left.

If there are no boundaries why did you leave?

If I can accomplish anything, why do you still torment me?

Everyday I go without your smile,

Everyday I go without your love,

Everyday I prove there are boundaries;

and yet, my memories of you excel me forward to believe

There are no boundaries.

Here I am, come back and show me what you say is true,

Prove to me, there are no boundaries.

[-Fuzzy-]

gosh ppl!! OPINIONS!!! give em!

[Guest prettypixxie]

i love it!

[glinalee]

i like it it's really cool keep writting

[Glass.Tears]

that was really good for your first poem

[Guest rawr.ima.dinosaur]

its gweat

[EG Tommy]

Way better than mine

[Guest rawr.ima.dinosaur]

yours are great to tommy