mikkaylah-blackheart x_x Posted August 13, 2011 Share Posted August 13, 2011 do you remember what it was like , back then, side by side you and me forever , never apart, love for each other was all we had , all wanted, I needed you to live and breathe, my light in the dark, you made my pain fade away, in to the dark of the night, our eyes gazed at each other, and as our lips met, I knew in my heart this was a moment, not to forget, do you remember what happened next, our forever ended fast , you left you had to go you had to leave , the dark took you in , thats why I wonder , where ever you are , do you remember me ? like I remember you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mikkaylah-blackheart x_x Posted August 13, 2011 Author Share Posted August 13, 2011 this is my first pome ever , feedback pls ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EG Tommy Posted August 13, 2011 Share Posted August 13, 2011 Very good. +1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mikkaylah-blackheart x_x Posted August 13, 2011 Author Share Posted August 13, 2011 Very good. +1 thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
endofgreen15 Posted August 13, 2011 Share Posted August 13, 2011 Wow that's really good, I like it alot Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mikkaylah-blackheart x_x Posted August 20, 2011 Author Share Posted August 20, 2011 thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zredtide Posted August 21, 2011 Share Posted August 21, 2011 this is my first pome ever , feedback pls ? Awwww..... I love it. ) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pinupdoll Posted August 21, 2011 Share Posted August 21, 2011 Awesome! Dark and depressing! My two fave qualities in poetry. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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