Guest Shevii Posted January 3, 2012 Posted January 3, 2012 (edited) Okay so i need advice and your opinion's on this poem, it is for a friend who is moving back to germany after being here for 6 months so yeah please what you think it can be as mean as you want and if you have tips to fix it up please feel welcome to coment them (: Please and Thank-you Even though your leaving, And going home, You will never be forgotten, With your smile, How it always made people smile, How much fun you are to be with, And your awesomeness, You are a true friend, And will be missed greatly, Even when your back in Germany, We will still be thinking of you, Remembering our great times, Smiling about it, And never forgetting about it, I cannot wait, Till I see you again. <3 . ((sorry just added abit to it >.< hope its okay)) Edited January 3, 2012 by Depressed_Emo_Chic
Guest Dark Light * Posted January 3, 2012 Posted January 3, 2012 first of all, 'your' should be "you're" It's a bit short, but that might be what you're trying to do hope i didn't sound mean Just trying to help, ya know
Guest Shevii Posted January 3, 2012 Posted January 3, 2012 haha all good xD and yeah i'm not the best at gramma and yeah i was thinking about making it longer just heaps hard when i'm not used to writting about positive things haha :/
Guest Dark Light * Posted January 3, 2012 Posted January 3, 2012 Yeah, writing is quite hard to do. Especially for me
Guest Shevii Posted January 3, 2012 Posted January 3, 2012 Yeah, personally i don't think i'm any good at it but everyone seems to think i should write her the poem :/
Guest Dark Light * Posted January 3, 2012 Posted January 3, 2012 you should write this tbh very touching
~justloveme~ Posted January 4, 2012 Posted January 4, 2012 nice poem..you should write this to your friend.....its so sweet ^-^
Guest Dark Light * Posted January 4, 2012 Posted January 4, 2012 no problem..its a very sweet poem (: very sweet indeed
Guest Shevii Posted January 4, 2012 Posted January 4, 2012 Haha Thank-you :3 i was abit iffy on doing it cause its my first positive poem Haha so im glad to hear its good
Guest Dark Light * Posted January 4, 2012 Posted January 4, 2012 girl, everything you touch turn to gold
~justloveme~ Posted January 4, 2012 Posted January 4, 2012 girl, everything you touch turn to gold yesh its very good for your first positive poem (:
~justloveme~ Posted January 4, 2012 Posted January 4, 2012 yesh ^^^ i agree...you should post more ^__^
Guest Shevii Posted January 4, 2012 Posted January 4, 2012 Awwwwww!! <3 You guys are the sweetest!! <3 ^.^
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