My song... First time sharing ._.

[Dragon_emo17]

The love tears

 

When I see you walking to me I saw your smile to me and make me smile back to you.

When I hear your lovely voice it made me melts.

When I hear you saying "I love you" to me. I believed in you.

 

Love isn't painful. It amazing feelings.

 

When you walk to me I smile but you didn't.

When I hear your voice saying "I don't love you"

I wanted die. I shouldn't believe in you.

 

I was wrong. The love is painful.

I'm crying my heart out. I wanted to be invisible. I don't believe in love anymore.

 

Im lost. I'm no one with no heart. I don't believe in love.

 

(I'm not finished it. And it's not edited. Should I keep going?)

Edited February 3, 2012 by Dragon_emo17

[Waffles]

You should keep going, i think its very nice!

I think maybe the last line "Im lost. I'm no one with no heart. I don't believe in love." Should be changed though as through the song you are sharing pain that was caused by love and here you say you dont believe in it. but as its unedited anyway im sure you already have plans for that

[OctoberShowers]

well i get you but love comes round in circles and if it wasnt this one there will be 'cause thats how things work. you just keep healing for now it will turn around.

[thatguy]

i think you should stop trying so hard and relax also read thru what you've written some of it makes little sense futhermore don't be so taboo

[Dragon_emo17]

Thanks FalseMajesty! :3 yeah i knew te last line isn't good. It just that I didn't edit it yet :3

 

Thanks!!