Black rainbows

[my.cold.heart]

My visions of a fairytale,

Were lovely,

But o so crushed,

I hoped for love and closure,

But u just gave me lust,

And while my body loved you,

My Mind was screaming No!,

And now I realize how you played me,

I hope u enjoyed the show.

My heart is broken,

But my life still goes on,

Like a cracked record,

it just repeats the same old song,

And if it doesnt kill me,

I guess it makes me stronger,

So Maybe I can endure this pain

just a little longer

[Erasmas]

Oh my Creator, I love this! +1 for joo.

[my.cold.heart]

Thank you anything recommendations I write a lot and feedback is always nice when neccesary

[Erasmas]

YES! One recommendation. This almost ruined the whole poem for me... Capitalize the start of the last line... -.-

 

^Kidding! No, seriously, you're better than me; I can't give you any advice. XD

[PurpleKitty]

This is really good i like it!!!

[my.cold.heart]

Haha thanks and yeah I'm on an I pod it messes up my spelling and punctuation all the time haha