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Night Vision:

 

I fell apart in your embrace,

Led astray by my own lies --

My hand softly against your face,

Staring into your eyes.

 

So much comfort in that memory,

A moment purchased with pain.

Now your presence leaves me,

Just like the sleep I feign.

 

So uncontrollably me --

Always falling over myself into you.

How undeniably me --

With your mark on everything I do.

 

Do you think of me in your dreams,

Or do you only have nightmares?

Do you hate me as it seems,

Or do you just not care?

 

I find myself waking in the night,

Wondering if you are okay --

Hoping you would make it right,

But always, I must wait another day.

Posted

Lol Thanks. :) It is one of my personal favorites. When I was writing it, it seemed awkward and mediocre, but after reading it, I am unusually satisfied with the outcome, lol. Thanks again.

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Haha, I am not very good. Still learning, lol. I like yours and Catch&Release's, but tbh I quit reading most of the others because I got sick of how many were posted in blocky paragraphs or just sucked. XD So I basically just read from the authors I know are good, lol.

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Haha well one can never stop learning.... im still learning too :P

thats funny cause I have stopped reading others except for Catch&Release and yours xD

I would read others when im extremely bored but generally wouldnt be bothered replying unless it was really good.... ^.^

Posted

hahaha yeah xD

 

yeah its not letting me do it for some reason O.o it mean!! i will +1 as soon as it lets me kay? it says i have reached my positive quota for the day or sumfin....but i havent used them O.o weird

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ahh, it seems as though i missed out on a party here.

 

The poem is good. I like it. +1 and whatnot.

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