Lyn-Z Way Posted March 4, 2012 Posted March 4, 2012 Okay so this is a new song I wrote. It's titled "What Will You Do Underground?" and it's in a girl's point of view and how her boyfriend cheated on her (quite scandulously might I add) and she takes a violent approach to it. Enjoy. Haha, I'd really appreciate comments. <3 It started out As a simple thing Nothing to hear at all No one to hear me sing Just a simple touch To bring me back to life Just because of me I'll bring you back inside This ain't done And I know you'll fix it with Your stupid pun That's getting older than the sun Get the fuck away From me; I never wanna see your face again Six feet under Hear the thunder Screaming out my name Stretched out corpses Hear the voices Buried in a grave Maybe just Just a little time For me to cool it off For me to stay in line So many things For me to choose from And I don't know which Will leave your heart beating like a fucking drum! This ain't done And I know you'll fix it with Your stupid pun That's getting older than the sun Get the fuck away From me; I know where you live, punk! Six feet under Hear the thunder Screaming out my name Stretched out corpses Hear the voices Buried in a grave Night and Daylight One final fight Against the dead Fangs and Vampires Moonlit dream liars Where were they led? Now I know you said you're sorry But there's nothing left to say As your blood's streaming down your face That's the only price to pay Think about this closely As your time is getting cut short What you did to me Was a little sickening But I mean, hey. She's a whore. Six feet under Hear the thunder Screaming out my name Stretched out corpses Hear the voices Buried in a grave Night and daylight One final fight Against the dead Fangs and vampires Moonlit dream liars Where were they led? Okay, well That's it. Please and thank you for any comments.
XxPocketSizedEmoVampirexX Posted March 4, 2012 Posted March 4, 2012 Its kool...iv tried writin a couple of songs n I faild epicly...
Lyn-Z Way Posted March 4, 2012 Author Posted March 4, 2012 Its kool...iv tried writin a couple of songs n I faild epicly... Aw, don't put yourself down so bad! My cousin thought she was horrible at writing poems, and she sent me one and it was AMAZING. I'm sure all you need is some inspiration and practice.
xXPaulLuvsUmbreonXx Posted March 4, 2012 Posted March 4, 2012 I wirght deep shit stuff in my notebook, I even wrote a song, and Im afraid if its not good enough
Lyn-Z Way Posted March 4, 2012 Author Posted March 4, 2012 I wirght deep shit stuff in my notebook, I even wrote a song, and Im afraid if its not good enough Don't be afraid to let your feelings rise out of the ashes. If people don't like it, then that's their problem. Open your soul and let it flow out. People will respect it.
xXPaulLuvsUmbreonXx Posted March 5, 2012 Posted March 5, 2012 Don't be afraid to let your feelings rise out of the ashes. If people don't like it, then that's their problem. Open your soul and let it flow out. People will respect it. thank u, thats good advice u got
Lyn-Z Way Posted March 6, 2012 Author Posted March 6, 2012 thank u, thats good advice u got You're very welcome.
Lyn-Z Way Posted March 9, 2012 Author Posted March 9, 2012 I like it's really good Thank you very much
Ghostface Killah Posted March 10, 2012 Posted March 10, 2012 It's really chill, I like the rhyme scheme you've done.
Lovely<3Dreamer Posted March 10, 2012 Posted March 10, 2012 That is Epic Your Really Good you need to find a band or singer to let them use your epicness!!!
Lyn-Z Way Posted March 10, 2012 Author Posted March 10, 2012 It's really chill, I like the rhyme scheme you've done. Thanks. It takes quite a while to get it right.
Lyn-Z Way Posted March 10, 2012 Author Posted March 10, 2012 That is Epic Your Really Good you need to find a band or singer to let them use your epicness!!! Ha, well I was actually planning to sing it myself It's just a matter of how I get musicians. I have a few, I hope they can capture the right sound!
Noonecaresforme1 Posted March 17, 2012 Posted March 17, 2012 I sang this out loud in my room to a beat I made and it sounded great. The lyrics are wondeful. My sis came in and said what are you singing and I just kept singing. Love the song!
Lyn-Z Way Posted March 18, 2012 Author Posted March 18, 2012 (edited) Edited March 18, 2012 by Postcards&Poloroids
Lyn-Z Way Posted March 18, 2012 Author Posted March 18, 2012 I sang this out loud in my room to a beat I made and it sounded great. The lyrics are wondeful. My sis came in and said what are you singing and I just kept singing. Love the song! Oh my goodness!! Thank you so much!
PurpleKitty Posted March 27, 2012 Posted March 27, 2012 your a really good song writer!!! me jelly >.> i have tried to write a song before and I fail epicly....i prefer writing poems though so dont bother me that much but I love your song its really good!!
Lyn-Z Way Posted April 2, 2012 Author Posted April 2, 2012 Absolutly love it. Keep it up! Thank you! I will
Lyn-Z Way Posted April 2, 2012 Author Posted April 2, 2012 your a really good song writer!!! me jelly >.> i have tried to write a song before and I fail epicly....i prefer writing poems though so dont bother me that much but I love your song its really good!! Thank you so much!! Honestly, I just write them. I don't try to make them sound great. I come up with a melody and it just flows from there i guess.
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