Ghostface Killah Posted November 1, 2011 Posted November 1, 2011 Hey... I kinda write songs, and I just wrote one. Tell me ur thoughts about it, and how I can improve and such. If you want to see more of my stuff, message me, or let me know. Anyway, hope y'all like this. Oh and by the way, It's rap rock- Like the old Linkin Park. Judged 2X Judged (Ever had a feeling you were ?) Judged (Even when you're flawless you are ?) Judged (Every day without no escape you're ?) Judged (Every single eye stares through your disguise) Another day gone by/ white lies dropping like dead flies Even shy eyes/ perceiving what might happen in the nights Pour on the sweet sugary cold mask of pretence A self-defence mechanism/ against the consequence Makes sense in a strange way/ in this dark hollow world Eyelids unfurl/ and stare straight at ya Information gradually leaking to the brain Prejudging you/ judging you So you gotta be fake/ hide the real you You can't afford to be see-through Cause their hate will eventually ease through What's realness when everyone's pretending? What's suicide when we're all like lemmings? Paralysis occurs frequently/ the twisted blessed anger Spread evenly/ run/ start running Or else you'll be run ragged by all the pretence Gagging on the splinters of the love issued out by sinners Winter/ approaching like it always does Somehow it's always dusk/ with all the women and men Who pretend Who gave them the right to predetermine what you're like? I'll fight/ all right/ but I'm struggling against the tide Of shut eyes wide open/ the unbroken frozen moment No emotion/ they just stare and judge Play fair/ I won't budge I don't know how long I can clutch the truth Hold on to a shred of myself I won't lose myself today Thinking why do I try/ sinking in the lies I repeat To people I confide in/ never discreet Anger's a gift/ cause I'd rather be pissed Than feel like this/ faking innocence Reminisce/ down my piss-poor memory lane Black liquor coursing through my empty veins Lengthy pains/ drawing strength from shame Flawed body/ we're all the same Thoughts shocked weak/ we're all the same All mundane/ all there's to gain Is perhaps a glimpse of a moment Where you feel no pain Shattered glass/ tattered mask Dressed in rags/ but pretending to be dressed like king and queens Rinse your dreams/ only the world stands between Your dreams and you The spotlight beams on you But you can't do a thing/ cause now the judgement leans on you All eyes on you now Let's see how much you'll take Before you get out 2X Judged (Ever had a feeling you were ?) (Rusted) Judged (Even when you're flawless you are ?) (Fucked up) Judged (Every day without no escape you're ?) (Used up) Judged (Every single eye stares through your disguise) (Shut up) Who gave them the right to predetermine what you're like? I'll fight/ all right/ but I'm struggling against the tide Of shut eyes wide open/ the unbroken frozen moment No emotion/ they just stare and judge Play fair/ I won't budge I don't know how long I can clutch the truth Hold on to a shred of myself I won't lose myself today 4X (I won't lose myself today)
Mickey Posted November 1, 2011 Posted November 1, 2011 This is cool you should post the music for it sounds like it would be an awesome song.
Ghostface Killah Posted November 2, 2011 Author Posted November 2, 2011 Thanks Is there anything I can improve? I'll be posting more of my stuff later on.
Mickey Posted November 2, 2011 Posted November 2, 2011 In like it the way it is, but I would try to work on there kind of being no chorus. Unless there is and I missed it lol.
Ghostface Killah Posted November 3, 2011 Author Posted November 3, 2011 The chorus is "Who gave them the right" verses". And thanks.
Ghostface Killah Posted November 12, 2011 Author Posted November 12, 2011 Eh, sorry for replying late. School work is killing me, I swear :/ And I just posted a new song y'all. I'd appreciate it, if anyone would check it out. Thanks.
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